Read it all and being honest,kinda left a weak impression. It feels more like an edgy self insert fic made by an inexperienced writer. Really hope not only that the writing gets better but that also Nolan gets some guts and becomes more independent
Also it doesn't help that the premise sounds a bit cliche and Nicolai,wich i assume is the main love interest,has a generic design and is shown to be your typical edgelord
Oof that's some hard feedback to read. This is my first time writing and sharing a story so I guess some rough edges are to be expected. The next update will include more insight into Nicolai's past and his motivations which hopefully elevate him above "edgelord" status. There is also a refinment of the earlier scenes such as between Nolan and Souldro in the hallway to better portray Nolan's inner turmoil.
Thanks for the review, it's a shame the story didn't resonate with you.
