This is one of my favorite games, and it's overflowing with potential, but there are some serious problems with the story itself and with the cues to the player regarding what his next task / options are; not to mention all the spelling and grammar mistakes. What I think you need is a good editor.
I've played GameOver as well, again a favorite with great potential, and it has the exact same problems - with the possible exception of spelling mistakes. I posted the same feedback on the GO page.