I played through this once and liked it. Definitely enjoyed the narrative- it was tense, sad, regretful, and the choices you had to make genuinely felt meaningful.
There were a couple errors in your game, starting on the "Home-team went disturbingly quiet after that" page. You might wanna run a spellcheck, too.
Overall, I liked it- clean up some of the game jam jank and you've got something solid here.