Thanks for your feedback, short indeed and it has no gameplay at all, I know, it should be a concept demo, at least it tries to be.
I could say that you don't have to worry... I worked a lot on all three things that you just mentioned.
And about the two NPC... There will be one story, but you can experience it as a boy (Peter) or as a girl (Jane)
That sounds good! Although if I might make a suggestion since you're so early, have you considered allowing players to name the characters themselves? It can be a bit of a pain when you get used to fast typing dialogue for specific name, but this would definitely be more immersive on the player side and is usually something appreciated vs being forced into a name that removes the player's will
