Just came across this, it oddly has a lot of parallels with my own life. It's so rare I get to play a Half-Japanese bisexual girl... xD
I hope you don't mind, but I figure I'll make some comments here as I play. I do really like the game, but there are a few things I wanted to note. ^_^
The scene with Violet & her BF at the start is probably out of place... It feels like it belongs after we meet Violet.
I think Act 1 could use a narrator. Scenes begin and end abruptly and the transition is rough, but a narration might help to make things flow better. If possible the 'X days later' messages should probably be done as a transition scene. Like a calendar advancing through the days.
Some of the text tends suggest you've had sex with a guy "I have had sex before, so I've seen a cock before", which seems awkward if you selected having a lesbian sexual experience before.
In the pool locker room the game suggests 'Rita' has never enjoyed female attention before... But she slept with a female friend in HS.
In the kiss scene with Haruka it suggests Rita hasn't kissed another girl... But that's only true if she's a 'virgin'.
And back for another day!
Violet and Rita don't seem to get much time together. This feels like a consistent problem. From when she is on the list for 'I want to have sex' to into Act 2. They really need to spend way more time together. Maybe it's because I chose the boys on the 'have sex' question, but it feels like Violet doesn't even get many scenes on her own anymore. She appears only slightly more than Sara in Act 2.
My only other note is that Luna's nipples often look weirdly placed on her bobs. They feel like the are high and to the outer side almost every time she's nude.
Also in general it often feels like there isn't a lot of girl talk going on... Maybe it's just women I know (& ones from certain TV shows), but when we get together we talk about sex. But it feels like these girls barely do. Heck Rita & Violet have never talked about the alley, but if a friend caught me doing that in an alley we'd definitely have a conversation about it. Especially if we had had sex.
Also of note the stats didn't update right when the guy at the hot springs took Rita's anal virginity. The 'Anal virgin' went away, but the 'anal sec count' says 0.
*Giggles* And that marks where version 0.16 ends. At least for one play through. 'Rita' feels super like me when I was that age, so I really enjoy the game. Though I may really want her to get super kinky and visit that 'bed of roses' society. But then in this run I pretty much teased and slept with everyone just for the fun of it.