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Opens with minifiction? Yes. Love that.
Written so that someone who has never played a TTRPG could GM this? Yes. LOVE THAT.
Open, expansive, and fully realized setting? BABES, yes. It's gorgeous stuff.
I love how hard you have leaned into fairy lore in every single page. Not once do you miss an opportunity to drive the theme home.

If I had a single criticism it is this: I want to take your fancy border and cast it into the fires of mount doom. 100+ pages is too many pages for my eye to get caught on that thing.

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I am so sorry about the border! I wanted some kind of framing instead of just white space, and it fit with the antique faerie stories aesthetic. If you want, I can upload a version without the border.

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Don't you dare! Really, Kumada, if that's the best criticism I could come up with, you ought to be really proud of yourself. It DOES fit with the antique faerie aesthetic.
It is worth mentioning: my complaint was not that I don't like it, it's JUST that it's on every single page. If you ever do a new layout on this, I humbly suggest you consider finding a second or even a third border. Use them as visual signals that the kind of information you are about to present on a page is a different KIND of information. This kind of visual signal helps people find the information they're looking for at a glance, is all.
If you never do a new layout on this then just leave it as is. It's still very beautiful.

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I'd actually planned that for my original layout, and it ended up feeling kind of jumbled in its implementation. I have a whole folder full of public domain page borders from the attempt, and I just couldn't get it to work. Using the same page border gave the book a kind of a throughline, and then I used the seasonal photographs to indicate changes of content and tone between sections.

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While I don't have the same problem - I could just ignore it after a few pages - I do think it's a bit aggressive. I'd probably shrink it a bit, or try to soften it by greyscaling it or thinning the lines.

Wonderful game, the moves feel like a nice evolution  from other PbtA games.

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I'll tinker with it!

I've already found a few things I want to adjust, mostly small stuff like some prepositions missing capitalization in the ToC. I'll collect feedback and then make some changes.