(This review contains spoilers, I guess I'm sorry if it’s so harsh)
Your OC Vel isn’t all that, sorry…but not actually sorry (lol).
You know it’s bad when a side character is more interesting than the main character..and I’m referring to Neu, Neu actually has a personality, is more interesting, AND actually not bland looking!!!
All Vel does is say things like "is it?" "Is that so?" It’s annoying, and it’s even more annoying that whenever she says things like that, Neu and the Y/N (or MC you play as) think it’s cute? How is stupidity cute? It makes you look like you’re uneducated, also she barley has any personality, like Neu said, all she does is play video games all day, she also says "I don’t know"…to EVERY. SINGLE. FREAKING. THING. ITS NOT FUNNY..ITS IRRITATING!!!
And now you have the MC, the character we apparently play as (sadly). First of all, are we supposed to be mental or something? Some "cute" girl (she’s actually super plain looking) shows up into our house, and his first thought is to take advantage of her and have intercourse with her?..I’m sorry but what? Do you not know how to build up an actual…REASONABLE…Story? (It’s okay, just admit you obviously can’t) AND GET THIS..GET THIS!! He says to Neu that he would have also tried to have intercourse if she also appeared into his house??..so this hornball will just fuck any girl that randomly appears into his house technically (So maybe we are mental..).
Anyways, to make this better, just make a story on Neu, or at least add an option for us to be with Neu..and let us chose our gender as well.