I’m checking through the text again and I was wondering if you could share the whole thing with me so I could make grammatical changes or suggestions more easily.
There are a few nit-picky changes like adding commas and hyphens. Also a few times when you used the wrong tense.
Porcelain was spelled porcelian in the customization page and continues throughout the story.
On the “A cool breeze” page Subtle was spelled sublte.
On the Your favorite color is____ page if you pick a short hair style there’s a typo saying “easy it is take care of.” instead of “it is easy to take care of.”
If you pick to be a singer it says : You have a voice of angel and there needs to be a ‘an’.
On the Ebbot City hasn’t changed page, street lights needs to be streetlights, you need a the in front of the word mafia, and orphanges needs to be spelled orphanages.
(There’s a few more so far but I haven’t had time to make sure I write them all down so I’ll need a bit more time. I hope this helps!;^;)