Admittedly, I think this might come down to a difference of stylistic opinion. I glanced at your game (planning on giving it a more thorough read tonight ^^;) and the pacing of it isn't what I would lean toward. With that said, I still appreciate the feedback.
Although the font issue is curious... Twine sometimes messes up on loading like that, in my experience (for example, I've had some people miss out on audio due to it not loading correctly), and I gotta look into a way to fix those inconsistencies. Thanks for the heads up, at least!
And I'm glad you liked the ending, even if the rest of it didn't hit the mark! Thanks for the feedback, again~