Checked Duke Nukem Manhattan game and yeah, I guess the camera is too slow. I made it referencing nier automata but not noticing the speed of the camera is really fast there as well.
As for the story, I think I overcomplicating it and made it not fit for the jam and become a story for a long play game or the lack of cutscene in the game which make it a bit weird and unrelated. I posted the script of the story that's supposed to be in a cutscene in the linked description.
Thanks for the input!