What tool did you use for this? Damn I need it now.
one remark about the story pacing: I started the maiden hunt in the "incorrect" order (right to left in the list) and the plot assumed I already have knowledge about the never seen scenes.
one way around this would be to make sure that the player must see the first chapter of every maiden's story in the logical order and lock the later girls - kind of an extended prologue, the early main plot scenes are an important lore dump.
bonus: one additional typo, next to the (still unfixed :P) ones I posted above
./scripts/mainstory/rui.rpy:1554: comission->commission
edited to add: "xxx city"?!? (hana.rpy:832) a forgotten dummy name or on purpose?