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The programming and presentation work here showed a movement and fluidity that many other VNs miss. The effort put into the interactions on the screen was visible. Really made me go "Well shit, that's a lot of fucking effort I don't have the bandwidth for.".

The interpersonal elements were sweet and well thought out. It honestly takes into consideration what are real concerns for longer term couples. Keeping the flame alive after the initial embers have passed away. You know you did well here. You don't need me to repeat it :).

The place where I think this dropped the ball was the lampshading of the "My Wolf" genre. It cast a strange worldbuilding onto it at odds with the worldbuilding required for the expression of the rest of the plot. An overthrown monarch replaced with a new monarch in a modern world with no real feeling as to what the monarchy represents? Is the implication this is supposed to be like literally  Adastra world? The rebel leader/chosen one now just a flower salesman in a modern society that has room for a mafia? Given there seems to be elements of capitalism I would have expected like a book selling tour at some point-- the memoirs of being a chosen one, or whatever.

The main point of this spiel is that to be able to work off of the joke of the isekaing "my wolf" it feels like it's distracting from the other elements of the story and making parts that are meant to be serious jokes, while not meaningfully adding.

I think if they were done more subtlety-- little world building elements trickled in, instead of the false start, it could have come off more organically and let the reader fill in the narrative gaps, whereas you've filled in enough space that we start to have room to question how is this society structured. Breadcrumbs can do more work towards hinting at a structure than an incomplete loaf of bread that's structurally malformed.