A cute romp. It doesn't quite tread new ground, but not every story has to. Characters often sounded believable, although we don't have perhaps enough time for our wolf here to avoid walking in the territory of suspicious (as someone aptly said on stream, kind of like 50 Shades).
It's a matter of time, really. Somewhat of a reflection of the nature of the game jam-- you wrote a scope that required more time than you had (perhaps achievable with a refocusing of your work) but what you had (mostly) contributed to moving the plot forwards.
Your scenes were purposeful, so there wasn't much fat to trim, but that meant the ending we careened into didn't have enough time, and that the motivations of Derick felt insincere given a little scrutiny. He came off as having ulterior motives in his perfection.
But well done nonetheless! Enjoyable. Well written all around, even if there were moments of language that felt... anachronistic? from a prior era of meme culture? I don't know, but that vibe, I suppose.