Cute little story! Sentence structure is very nice and pleasant to read :3. The only notes I have on the writing is the pacing was a little slow for my personal tastes and I didn't find the characters incredibly interesting. That said, these are only minor complaints and from the perspective of my personal tastes. From an objective standpoint, the writing was well done overall.
I'm a big fan of the presentation. The colorful BG's (beautifully photographed, btw) and offset-from-center sprites is a nice a touch that gives this entry a lot of character :3. The custom side sprite is also a great element that helps this one stand out.
I'm very glad we got to see a fiction Bjaker VN! This was well composed, cozy, and showcased your resourcefulness as a dev. It makes me very excited for L'automne!