I AM RATING THESE ALL THESE JAM SUBMISSIONS RELATIVE TO ONE ANOTHER. THERE ARE HIGH HIGHS AND LOW LOWS BUT PLEASE DON’T TAKE THIS TOO PERSONALLY, AFTERALL, WE ALL ONLY HAD A MONTH.

Story (2):

It’s certainly the beginning of a story but one that I can’t really sympathize with, considering my own personal luck with romance. The writing did have the perfect amount of flowerliness which is fitting with a title like that. Doesn’t overstay its welcome.

Presentation (2):

Besides the opening studio video, which wasn’t used in Hearth & Home, and the tiger tits side sprites. Nothing else really sets it apart from the other Jam submissions.

Creativity (1):

Where is the breast milk?!?/s

Total (5):

Like with Blossoming Love, the creator did give themselves less time then everyone else so that needs to be kept in mind.

At least now there is a precedent for people adopting characters to use in Jams.

Who knows what misadventures Peter will get into in the future?

I'm not the biggest SoL fan, and this story was a bit too mundane for my personal tastes.

But I must say that I quite enjoyed the "vibes" of this entry. The artwork, the backgrounds, the music, all blend together into a good charming mix. I love the MC's sprite and he comes off as a genuinely cool dude you'd love to hang out with.

Sweet tale. Also surprisingly short.

You will have to excuse me for my malding at something as silly as seeing you write haikus... without a seasonal reference. It comes off as like, poet's first poem and while I haven't even bothered trying to meaningfully get into the literary market for poetry (most of them seem to be honorarium fees or pay to play), I'd like to say I'm at least well versed enough in poetry to suggest where you could have gone instead (I do love form poems-- it's perhaps more "work" but you could have popped off with a villanelle and I would have been like ヽ(´▽`)/). 

Like this is just a very minor me malding comment that I'm just bringing up as like a haiku sans seasonal reference hater (as a firm believer that one should like, master form poem's conventions before experimenting with them-- limitations breed creativity).

It was nice to have a variation in the sprite of the protagonist, the dragon's use of Spanish felt true to real life, the backgrounds were done well-- it was a solid package. The vibes were certainly on point

But it was also so short for all of the setup you gave us. That's perhaps the main "story" issue. We're approaching build-up and then it gets pulled out from under us with little more than the "meet cute". That being said, an issue of leaving the readers wanting more is not the worst issue to have when someone finishes a work :p

Cute little story! Sentence structure is very nice and pleasant to read :3. The only notes I have on the writing is the pacing was a little slow for my personal tastes and I didn't find the characters incredibly interesting. That said, these are only minor complaints and from the perspective of my personal tastes. From an objective standpoint, the writing was well done overall.

I'm a big fan of the presentation. The colorful BG's (beautifully photographed, btw) and offset-from-center sprites is a nice a touch that gives this entry a lot of character :3. The custom side sprite is also a great element that helps this one stand out.

I'm very glad we got to see a fiction Bjaker VN! This was well composed, cozy, and showcased your resourcefulness as a dev. It makes me very excited for L'automne!

Very sweet and wholesome! I wish there was a little more to it towards the end, maybe hanging out with the wolf after work; but overall the presentation and story is very solid!

What is there is pretty compelling and promising. There is a good amount of polish, and the original character design looks nice. I can't help but feel like it's all setup and payoff, though; the opening of the story did not make it seem like this would be its entire extent. Maybe the climax could have felt more conclusive with stronger framing and a tighter focus.

It's sweet