My thoughts --
- On the music, there are parts where the melody worked, and parts where it felt all over the place, parts where it invoked dread, and parts where it felt very uncharacteristically uplifting. One thing I'd advise you on is, brush up on your tonality and our cultural and historical associations with chords -- this'll help your emotional literacy when writing themes. These are things that can be learnt through osmosis, through listening to scores that have impacted you over the years.
- Staccato is a good choice rhythmically for this sort of piece because it gives it a drive and an urgency. So I guess the TLDR is that you've got the right ideas rhythmically, but not entirely, tonally.
- On the FX:
- Under Attack has that BLOOD-CURDLING gurgly, warbling sound that truly makes it sound otherworldly and frightening. Well done!
- The death FX was also alien in its sound, though I feel it could've used a touch more impact.
- That roar was also probably one of the most terrifying I've heard in this jam, full stop, just due to the sheer warbling and alien nature of it. It could do to be a touch thicker and sharper, but it still managed to instill dread in me all the same. Solid work!
Well done on your submissions -- I note, again, that you're one of those who submitted in such a short time, with hours to spare before the deadline; props for that. All the best in the jam!