This one is suuuper adorable! Love how you replicated the artstyle of the show, it gives the game a really cozy feeling. I also really love the focus/emphasis on Grizz's figure and eating habits. Itch is full of VNs featuring characters who are conventionally attractive, some chubby/fat representation is very much needed~
The only criticism I could levy is that the writing can feel a bit rushed at times, both in terms of the narrative and grammar-wise. There's some punctuation marks missing here and there, there's inconsistent capitalization, and often the narrative feels like it's going at a breakneck pace. Maybe take a bit more time describing things or more thoroughly setting up the environment/situation so that the reader can better immerse themselves. Proofreading/revising/editing is half the work when it comes to writing~
But yeah, very fun and cute VN overall. Keep up the great work, can't wait for more to come! :3