Extremely short but seems to have potential. The premise and writing is good, I will have to say that the opening sequence lacks thrill and excitement. Instead of waking up safe and sound why not wake up while under attack or someone trying to kill you?
Why not show the MC briefly living a normal day and then getting violently killed? Don't just show "I wake up with no memories and some random said I was revived"
That's boring and passive. No thrill or danger.
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this is just bad criticism lol...
why would the author show the mc living a normal day when the premise is obviously built around u not remembering who u are? on top of that, the hook already involves the introduction of some sort of mob boss, a man being murdered off screen and a contract killer being hired, which was clearly enough to pique the interest of 99% of the commenters.
u are the literary equivalent of someone who needs a soap cutting clip on top of a subway surfers vid to hold ur attention 💀 if u want to give constructive criticism, keep it objective criticism. dont whine because an author didnt cater to ur warped personal standards