Great update so far I will finish it later TN.
I'm digging the extreme internal conflict and awkwardness right now with Rachel chasing after the mc but your gay feels like my own highschool life lmao... Midwest America vibes.
Keep the updates coming I'm glad this feels rooted in real life. Rachel and Olivia are refreshing characters and very welcomed in a sea of gay vns with all dudes.
Spoiler opinion below.
Edit* I just finished reading and I loved it!
The only thing I'd critique is I wish their was a bit of dialogue or something after the car scene, I understand the conversation is probably coming later but I think more should have been said in that moment. A simple "I'm sorry I shouldn't have done that" or "I don't know why I did that shit I'm sorry" would have felt right. It just felt like something was missing. Also I'm not sure if it was my settings but some of the transitions when the location/scene changed felt jaring, sometimes I expected more text or something leading into the scene ending but it would just cut to the next scene.
Minor critiques I still loved all of it :)