Nice Text-based Pick a path, but there are some things I would suggest looking at.
Right now, there are lots of dead ends (which is fine - early access), but you might want to either remove the "this is what will happen" or put them behind spoilers because it kinda ruins the feeling of wanting to come back, after all, you know what is going to happen.
Could I also suggest that you alter some of your paths so they don't really "tell you" what will happen? Right now, when going through it, I feel a little like your choice was pretty much a "spoiler" of your path, and there were no real surprises throughout the story. Also, I notice that many of them keep returning to pretty much the same type of "scene" just a page or two before, so this makes you feel that maybe the choice wasn't essential to start with.
Good writing overall, so I am looking forward to your future work with this.
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... huh. I don't know how to do spoiler tags in this program. that is a good idea.
fair enough although other then the ones where you meat a spefific creature, (hard to avoid) the others seem hard to tell.
I mean going to drive to the car turning into a harpy is hard to guess.
thanks a lot. I have a few other stories btw.