Pretty cool! I think your narration is pretty good and I get a clear idea of what's ahead and the inclusion of a soft retry button is quite nice! I certainly don't enjoy restarting entire stories whenever I mess up when I want to test things out. Also, the choices carry appropriate consequences without feeling like they don't make sense. That out of the way, I want to point a few things out in hopes of helping out in case you want to go back and fix them:
Some choices look out of place when they show up alongside the story text instead of disappearing like other choices, like "Lean back and enjoy the silence" but there were a few others. Also, I had several cases where the game would stop loading text for me and force me to restart. I haven't seen this happen with other exclusively-ink games so I wanted to point it out. It might be something on my end or not, I have no clue! Hopefully, it's just a small issue on my end.
Overall, good job!