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Pretty cool! I think your narration is pretty good and I get a clear idea of what's ahead and the inclusion of a soft retry button is quite nice! I certainly don't enjoy restarting entire stories whenever I mess up when I want to test things out. Also, the choices carry appropriate consequences without feeling like they don't make sense. That out of the way, I want to point a few things out in hopes of helping out in case you want to go back and fix them:

Some choices look out of place when they show up alongside the story text instead of disappearing like other choices, like "Lean back and enjoy the silence" but there were a few others. Also, I had several cases where the game would stop loading text for me and force me to restart. I haven't seen this happen with other exclusively-ink games so I wanted to point it out. It might be something on my end or not, I have no clue! Hopefully, it's just a small issue on my end.

Overall, good job!

Yea, for some of the options, I should’ve set the ink script to not print them out, as they don’t make sense to be with the rest of the story. Do you happen to remember where it got stuck?

Appreciate the feed back!

I don't remember the specifics, I'm sorry! I should have made screenshots. Each time it got stuck, it was at random points, that's why I'm a bit confused as to whether they're exclusively on my end or not.