Wow, chaos is a good descriptor and you hit your mark on that! Though I think that having the percussion outline the rhythm, even though it’s not predictable, helps give some sense of direction to it, which makes it fun to listen to. Your instrumentation is unique, but definitely gives a scary feel which fits the Halloween theme well. Your crow and owl sound effects are well-placed and remind me that the setting is a pumpkin patch. You mentioned that you felt the structure was sporadic, but I didn’t feel there was any point in which I felt that one section did not belong where it was - it fits very well with the chaotic intention of the piece! One suggestion that I have is that while you have multiple playing the exact same melody line in monophony, it would be cool to explore trying to add two separate lines together to create some chaotic harmony; this idea of counterpoint is something I’m still working on as well and is something definitely easier said than done. Overall great work and thank you for sharing! Thank you also for your dedication to listening to and commenting on all the other submissions. It is people like you who make these jams so fun and such a positive learning experience!
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Honestly I was having trouble writing the percussion so I'm glad it helps in some way. Usually it's the first thing I make, but this time I started by writing the melody. Essentially went: Lead Melody → Drums → Bass Guitar → Melody Support → Samples. I am definitely going to look into the idea of counterpoints, I really appreciate this pointer! Honestly I think I can do a lot more with the supporting guitar, and it would be cool to see that.
And no problem, I had a lot fun listening to everyone's songs! I took notes for each song I listened to, and I feel like I learned a lot from the process. I hope my thoughts and critique are useful for everyone.