Notes from gameplay:
- Beautiful art for main menu. I like the shadowed sidebar for the options
- Music would be nice here
- Awesome preferences menu, especially text speed. Unsure what Auto-forward time does
- Nice job with help menu
- Load is nice, assuming there will be an option to save later
- Nice chill background music.
- Splash art conveys coffee shop. AI generated?
- Cute customer sprite, nice voice acting
- Dialog default volume is low. Inconsistent volume levels between characters
- Nice consistent anime style for the characters
- Volume adjustment for voice vs music (making voice higher) seemed to do the opposite
- some typoes, such as heero agency
- Writing could use editing for spelling/grammar and to punch up the word choices.
- Screen's gone black?
- Nice creepy voice for villain
- Auto is a cool option
- I like the subtle animations, like veil's eyes going wide when he says shit
- Ooh creepy nosebleed on Veil
- Nice effect with heartbeat noise and animation
- Ah it's done
This was a nice demo. I think the writing could use some improvement and editing - since writing is such a strong focus of your work, it needs to be exciting, easy to read and well-written enough to keep readers hooked. A great start! Good luck as you continue.