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So I finally have time to read this VN again after 1.0 and I gotta say, I really like the changes done to the beginning. Less is more, the reduced inner dialogue and descriptions made the story felt less draggy, especially for an interaction-heavy VN. Imo, details should only be described when necessary, most of the environmental stuff should already be visible on screen so it would be redundant to visualize them through text. Focusing more on the story flow is one of the reasons why I love VNs like Lagoon Lounge, Knight's College, Chardonnay Romancia, etc.

Here's a few things that I noticed after finishing the current newest build(5.0):

1. When getting interrogated by the polar bear right after the cat fight, I feel like there's too much sentences used just to get the "I struggle to come up with words" message across. The same goes for the small interaction before reaching the bar after leaving the lounge, the back and forth between the MC and Rou along with MC's inner dialogues felt a little excessive here when the whole conversation doesn't contribute much to the story.

I feel like this is due to being immediately after 1.0 where the writing style remains unchanged. After that though, the story starts to flow much smoother and became more engaging.

2. This is a very small detail, after the MC woke up in Rou's room there is a CG, and during this CG Rou revealed that he used to be a bodyguard. In this instance it should be the second time that Rou said that he's a bodyguard (the first is during Rou comforting the MC) yet the MC reacted ("huh, really?") like he just heard it for the first time. Nothing big, just felt a little weird upon reading it.

3. Another small detail. During the power plant investigation, Javier told the MC that he directs the security cameras to another channel when doing so at the very first camera. Yet a few instances later the MC assumes Javier is turning them offline and asks about it, making Javier explain again. Again not significant, just a little weird.

Overall a very good and interesting read, the climax(this could mean in both ways~) moments are executed expertly and not applied too frequently(I do not like being constantly kept on my toes). While there are a few segments that could use more refinement, I really like the balance between interaction and inner dialogue used in the newer changes. Keep up the fantastic work, I'll be looking forward for more.

Some extra comments:

Rou's facing forward face still gives me uncanny valley vibes, but at the same time it's also funni, so... eh.

The Halloween extra is nicely written, too bad I do not like horror, especially jump scares.

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Thanks for your feedback! I really appreciate it, and hope you look forward to future updates!