Thank you for the feedback!
Yeah I get that all now to think about it, it's pretty written weird because last year, I was probably a bit too ambitious and tend to write with a flowery structure so it can sound odd to some but fine to me.
It happens a lot when I speak too so it's why I have testers at the time. I am surprised they didn't point it out but I guess it's because they knew how I talk anyway! To others, it might be different so it takes an interesting perspective! Thank you for letting me know.