... so, no word of what kinds of activism kutaka got up to. just, "we did some stuff, and it got better." how? it's unsaid. why is it unsaid? did you lack confidence in your ability to describe what kinds of actions you believe would produce meaningful change? it all reads as very weak. it's dismissive of revolution, but offers no kind of alternative. just a "no, that route won't work and will get a lot of people hurt, so instead i'm going to do *mystery activities* that will *help bring people together* through *interpersonal mechanisms i won't explain*. and this just works, because it would be convenient if it worked? it reads as so deeply naive. even a more charitable reading still feels like you were just afraid to say what you really wanted to say.
the comments section of this itch novel are probably not the place to get into a dissertation on my actual politics, which are strongly in favor of social anarchy, (anarchy being a philosophy that i feel most people have the wrong idea about due to being actively lied to about it by the state, who wishes everyone to believe that it's a synonym for chaos and lawlessness, when it is actually serious nonviolent political position advocating for real means for people to support their communities, offering ways to make grassroots support happen and specifically not accept the idea that any human can be above another (anarchy literally meaning "without hierarchy")), but regardless of the position you were arguing for, i would have been happier if you actually argued for it. (well thats not true. i would have been much angrier if you were pro-fascism. but if you want to go for a leftist angle then etc etc)
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I had more I wanted to write on that conflict but the deadline hit me hard. Also I realized pretty late into it that trying to be nuanced about politics in a game I make in 3 days is going to be hard. If I redo it I will probably add other endings where Kutaka changes her approach or beliefs based on your choices.
I actually agree with your politics mostly, but I'm really bad at expressing it and found it hard to write into the story in the time limit. I wanted Kukata to not just be a self-insert of my political beliefs but the good ending works out too well so if I were to change it, I would probably have a mix of good and bad outcomes. Like if Kutaka ends up stopping the revolution but supports some aspects of it, maybe she does something that starts a new conflict. Or if she doesn't change the way she does her activism, then once she stops the revolution things don't change or get worse for birds.
I think having the religion system also made it harder for me to write Kutaka's political beliefs, since I made her unchanging in her beliefs even when it didn't make sense, in order to make it easier to write the religious parts. I think if I wanted to make the political parts work better, I shouldn't have overscoped with the religion and skill system that ended up wasting a lot of time during development I could have spent on making the writing better.
> so, no word of what kinds of activism kutaka got up to. just, "we did some stuff, and it got better." how?
I feel like I did mention a little here. Kutaka stages a sit-in that helps sway some humans to her side. Though rereading it again I could have went into more detail. I think it would work better if I broke the ending up into multiple passages and went into details about what happened in each one instead of having like two sentences.
You brought up a lot of good points and I'm going to take a lot of this into account if I make a significant update.