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Hello, and again this is really great work.  

I actually did watch someone who played this game too afterwards and I noticed that their selection for a beginning question helped resolve a lot of my uncertainty I had at the beginning when I played.  

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It was the question, “Do you believe in what they’re saying about the witches’ curse?”  

I had picked, “I suppose not.”

But the gameplay video someone else did picked, “Yes, I do.”

When seeing the “Yes I do” response it really helped me to understand their world better.  

Whereas the selections I made I don’t remember an explanation of how the townspeople viewed the legend exactly in general.  Nor history of the town itself being very clear. 

Believe it or not but when I heard at the beginning of the story that Kael had just appeared with medieval knowledge and getup in town I was thinking he may be from another dimension or world, or realm.  Basically not from her world.  Or that there was an underground secret magical society similar to Harry Potter.  And that she might be a descendant of someone who magically traveled to her world from a magical world.  

But, I never thought that their town’s history had a palace and kingdom with a witch and everything in the past.  I guess it was more like I thought the town had a fairytale about a witch from a magical world who happened to come to their world and town.  But they all thought it was fictitious.  

In retrospect I can see how that probably should be obvious that the town was where the palace had been—but the townspeople just thought the magic part of the story was fictional and possibly that the witch was fictional.  (Or maybe they do know magic existed?)  But it’s true when I read through I didn’t pick up on the palace being a literal part of their history until much later and didn’t understand it as well as I would have if I had seen the “Yes I do” dialogue.  

So, I dunno it that helps but maybe I suggest considering adding some dialogue to the No response that still tells the history.

Sorry I am a long winded speaker.  But it’s really cool and hope you get time to write more.

Yeah that's a very fair point! Again I really appreciate all the detailed feedbacks!!! <3

Usually a story consists of 3 elements:

  • Characters
  • Plots
  • World building

As you pointed out in this and the first posts, in this story I didn't do enough writing on the world building, it's only natural that it failed to help the readers explore the world and ensure we're on the same page:) That will be one of my goals in the remastered game to fix this issue in addition to clear some loose ends in the plots! 

I might have some free time around June this year to start working on it:) Currently I'm studying a music composing course in the spare time, the course will finish around April. 

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Since you mentioned it, if you are curious -- the fairytale is more or less a sugarcoated version of the real history of that kingdom. You might notice that the endings of Miss Witch in the past are very different:

  • In the fairytale: Miss Witch married Prince Aidan and they lived happily ever after.
  • In Brannan's memory: Miss Witch was burned on the stake, he didn't mention what happened to Prince Aidan but he never liked him. 

That all sounds so awesome.  ^-^  I hope you have a great year and have that relaxing, fun time to write.  It’ll be so exciting to see!  

Thank you!! <3 <3 <3 

Same to you my dear player, I hope you also have fun to enjoy many games in your free time this year!