This is insanely good! The story, visuals, and music tie together perfectly! You've made something really memorable ^^ the only thing I'd change is- the vore felt a bit jarring..? (I say this as someone into vore x) I love the tone of the story but I personally feel like the vore doesn't blend well into it. I dunno, maybe it's bc I'm still a bit embarrassed of being into it myself x) and scary monster maw doesn't appeal to me
Overall fantastic and I look forward to following you :3