The story is near good and it's flow is going good until the introduction of Hunter. Like who the fuck is Hunter and is he something useful in the story? Is he that significant?...and why the fuck a random girl named Eden who's so over the heels with him? This is a harem AVN, right? Meaning all the girls you've shown to us should be the property of MCs including the girl who's inlove with Hunter and I also sense that this dev is making a mini-harem for this dude Hunter with the appearance of this Eden girl, Mary(since he outrightly rejected our MC) and her two daughters. If that will be true, then, dev should go to hell and his shitty story ideas...