Found sort of repeating bit of text or is it supposed be that way?
You probably should take look at this variable. doesn't really fit in to the sentence "her" would work better.
save: https://pixeldrain.com/u/MH2SvPwE
List of pronouns set just for sake of information:
Should be "has returned"
I think only one of the replies should be here
"What MC says is true." :D 
You should probably add a neutral line here: 
Missing first letter
MC again
