It was interesting to see a story that ends with consequences for someone other than the main character. I feel like most of our first thoughts was "how can I make my main character suffer", rather than, "how can my main character cause someone else's consequences?"
The flow was a bit choppy, and the use of caps can be a bit grating, but I think your story had good connectivity none the less.
I'll also soapbox for a second that I'm generally opposed to implied sexual violence as a plot device. You don't directly say that is what happened, but it gives that vibe to me. I think it is used far too often in media and can easily be forgone, especially when it is not based in any specific historical precedent or real-world example. Sexual violence virtually never makes a story better, in my opinion. This didn't impact my ratings of your story! It's just something I wanted to put out there for my fellow writers.