Style: The submissions were required to use the provided formatting and to fit on one page. All of that white space should have been single line breaks and indentation on the first line of each paragraph. Dialogue that does not terminate needs to end with a comma immediately before the end quotation. You should describe the speakers' tone or volume rather than using caps for dialogue.
Content-wise, it's a fine scene. The concepts of dwarves vs elves/dark elves being naughty is not unique, but this was a good offering to those ideas. You could have spared a few of the repetitive beats of dialogue and used that word count to be more descriptive of the setting, the actions, the emotions we are observing. Dropping the consequences line at the end was a bit on-the-nose, but some people like that.
3.5/5