Very nice composition! You did very well transmitting your feelings of the theme to your piece.
I was able to hear and feel almost exactly what you wrote in your fit the theme text before I even read it, so I applaud you for that!
The main advice I have is that there is some strange compression or volume changes when your voices come in to the mix. Its most noticeable to me at around 18s and 1m38s and it seems to mostly affect the lyre more than anything.
Ah... I think I know what you're talking about now. Some of the strings on the lyre are quieter/harder to pluck at that volume, depending, so when it gets loud, that aspect of the instrument stands out. Compression already improved that situation, but it didn't improve it as ideally as it could have. Since I designed the instrument myself, one thing I've had to do is figure out the proper string gauges, and it ends up being more finnicky than expected.
Also... the top strings are gut, which I think amplifies that effect of needing accurate string gauge to get proper tension.
