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Congrats on getting a submission in! I will say from the start that this one was a lot of fun to read. And I had a few thoughts as I made my way through:

  • Your intro had me hooked from the get go! And you followed very closely with great classes with some fun abilities. Strong start!
  • Small thing: mention your ABCD stats a second earlier. Just because that was the only thing that I was confused by with the "Make a Character".
  • Noble sacrifice... WHAT A GOOD MECHANIC! For real, I did stop for a moment and was like "that's really awesome."
  • One thing to watch for, some of your sentences run on. Which I know is the last thing we all were worried about during the 48.
  • Really like the Places which include example encounters and NPCs. Also the Villains and Heroes, I know exactly who they are and how they might affect the narrative. I was glad to see "Aliens" because I want the havoc to feel widespread (more so than 1v1 fight might). 

Yeah, this one ticked a lot of boxes for me. One small thing I was wondering is if this would work better as a Godzilla / Kaiju fight where the people were running. But I think as it stands you've done a great job.