Monsters in a dungeon! Nice job! Here are some thoughts I had while reading:
- Good, clear intro. Only thing I might add is how am I mechanically going to do the narrative. Dice or whatever?
- The biggest thing this need is layout. Cause I can tell you have a lot of good stuff here but trying to parse it now is very difficult.
- You built out a ton of unique strengths and weaknesses! I like that you choose which ones you want. Memories are also a nice aspect of character creation.
- I like that you have a d4 system cause the caltrop is under-used. The trading up for dice is interesting. And I don't mind the 1 fail, 2-5 mixed success, and 6+ success... actually pretty easy.
- Hidden and Evading were a bit confusing.
- You need clearer nomenclature for PCs & NPCs. Especially regarding NPCs, I often wasn't sure if it was a Hero or NPC Monster.
- All of your tables are nice... and there sure are a lot!
- I would love to see a section about the Dark Lord, specifically how whatever he is doing is affecting the timeline and why the adventurers are there