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Nice wind and sunflower growth animation! Like audio and narrative by chapters. 
Have some feedback about writing. I see my old mistakes, you shouldn't describe everything, moreover, obvious things. Readers should find it themselves. How? It's your job of a writer:) 
You dont describe that something happened, you write it so it happens (i forgot exact wording, hope the meaning left clear)
About emotions. I remembered a saying that if you want your reader to cry you must yourself burst in tears.
You try to express overwhelming emotions in simple ways. I wish I could list all problems and solutions to them but i'm not a writer myself though i tried years ago because i love reading (was too harsh on myself and gave up). Taste and sense will come eventually when you will have read many good-quality books. 
And I hope that you'll not stop like i did.

Btw, верю, что английский:))