Overall an interesting journey that flips between dream states and reality. I liked the mystery woven into the narrative, with only hints given and no definitive answers early on. This kept the mystery of the letter and admittance into school a constant unknown element.
The use of bioluminescent as a metaphor works extremely well for the theme. The story starting out by describing all the ways bioluminescence can be used sets up the rest of the story. Also, casting light on the darkness of a mystery was a theme you expertly referred back to in multiple scenes.
I was a bit unsure of a few things, which could be fixed by something like varying the colours.
- dream state vs reality. Possibly having two different background colours would work well for this. Check out the “tag” system in twine.
- links that progressed the story vs links that are background info. Two different colours here would be helpful.
Also, I wasn’t clear what the goal was after I discovered the password and went for a walk. I got stuck in a section I was sure where to click.
Overall, a solid twine game, that had a nice theme which linked everything together.