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• p. 51 The new skeleton image is captioned "faded shade"
• p. 25 Eagle of the Glacier (Gammur). For consistency, "weak to fire" should come at the end of the sentence about its immunities instead of being separated by a period.
• p. 8 Beetle, Fire. Possibly same as above regarding "weak to ice", but a case could be made for keeping it separate because of the uniqueness of it being distracted by magic rather than immune/resistant/weak to it.
• p. 34 The mastodon image is missing a caption.
• p. 60 Wolf ought to come before Wolfskin, alphabetically.
• p. 56 Now that dismembered is defined in the book, Warg's dire strike ought to refer to that.

A few more for the list

• p. 11 Cat, Sabre-tooth statblock, in the line that starts "Dire strike: fangs disembowel", "fangs" should have an initial capital to maintain consistency with the rest of the book
• p. 36 Mimic statblock, same as above for the line that starts "True form: voracious gaping maw"
• p. 6 Bear, Cave statblock, "1d6 Str damage" should be "d6 Str damage" for consistency with the rest of the book.
• p. 18 Deathseer statblock, same as above for "1d4 Souls"
• p. 19 Death Warden statblock, on the first line, "bearded axes (d8 | dual | 30')" the use of vertical lines on either side of "dual" created some confusion at first glance—the relationship between "d8" "dual" and "30'" was not immediately clear. It is also inconsistent with much of the rest of the document where terms like "(d6 blast)" are not separated by a vertical line (although there are some exceptions such as Gargoyle's "Fire Breath (d10 blast | 40')" using a line between "blast" and "40'" but not between "d10" and "blast.") I recommend picking one format for stats and sticking to it for readability.
• On a related note, I noticed Death Warden uses both "30'" and "30ft" and when I looked over the rest of the document to see which was the standard I realised they're used interchangeably throughout. "ft" seems to be the standard in the core rules, so I recommend sticking with that.

In no particular order

• p. 47 Sea Reek (Hafgufa) statblock, the Legendary creature line is formatted inconsistently from the other Legendaries.
• p. 37 Muspelhound statblock, the phrase "may spontaneously appear near lava floes" is a non-standard usage of floe, and would be better replaced with lave flow. Floe does—coincidentally?—have its roots in Old Norse, but it has no relation to the word flow and the only usage I'm aware of is in reference to long, flat masses of floating ice.
• p. 36 Mirth (Hamingja) statblock, the phrase "Sorrow: sings to the dreams in slumber" is awkward phrasing.
• p. 22 Dragon of the Mists (Dreki) statblock, "Poison breath: Emits green cloud" should be "Emits a green cloud"
• On pages 1 (title & copyright page), 8, 9 (twice), 15, 28, 51, & 54 a right single quotation mark ’ is incorrectly used in place of an apostrophe '
• p. 28 Hidden Folk (Huldra) statblock, travellers is misspelled "travllers"