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don't know why but I like that you have the option of changing your feelings in the Moments instead of the prelude of step 1. Again it just feels so much more realistic to me because, of course, you would be wary and indifferent when you meet someone new but your feelings would change over time based on how much time you spend and get to know the other person. I created my MC to be apprehensive and shy towards Qiu, because he reminds him of the bullies who had picked on him in his old school but his behavior changed when he saw how Qiu stood up against Darren's sexism and made MC acted friendly towards Qiu as oppose cold and indifferent. There is also a point where Qiu tells my MC how cool he is even though my MC came in last place in the race and there is an option in the dialogue box for the MC to have a gay panic moment of self-realization "Wait, I think I have a crush on him now?! Why is this happening??" There is so much room for improvisation and complexity in this game.

Okay. Here are some thoughts on the writing so far, it's pretty great. All characters except for one seem to have a purpose within the story. Everyone except for Baxter Ward. I get that he is supposed to be more of a background character but he needs to do more other than "And Baxter just stood there unaffected by what just happened with a smirk on his face." Once is fine, but he's no longer interesting when he almost always gets described at great length by that in the story. It's irritating after a while. 

But that's my only problem with the writing.