Thank you! I really wanted to work with the Stalkers, trying to make them "good" while at the same time keeping that creepy, alien feel that the concept art gives off.
Good story! As feedback, I'd say, take care of tenses; the story was mostly in present tense, but some parts switched to past tense and back to present. Aside from that, separating different voices in dialogues into new lines really helps the reader understand who's speaking, without needing to clarify too much. One character speaks, the other replies in the line below, and so on.
