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What a beautiful translation! It was a joy to read.

There were minor typos, and I think you mistook "Major Rawson" for "Mayor Rawson", but honestly these don't matter so much. Just a matter of polishing it up.

¡Saludos!

This is a much more faithful translation than LocJAM's sample version, and the creative elements were a nice surprise. However, I found it not quite as good in terms of readability and presentation. A lot of sentences clearly inherited their syntax from the French original, appearing less like sentences, but more like fractured clauses littered between jarring commas and periods.

I feel like things as simple as some well-placed conjunctions could do well to "oil up" this piece and make it flow better. Maybe also check out LocJAM's English version now that the JAM is over? I found its language style something to learn from.

Overall, GJ, cheers!    :D

I think I did something wrong during submission and the project uploaded didn't show up in the list of entries. I already asked in another thread, but for now I'll post it here in case nothing else works.

https://guochenzi.itch.io/larrestation-darsne-lupin

First time in a jam here, sorry for not knowing my way around :'(

Same here. Complete newbie to itch.io, uploaded the project just fine but it doesn't seem to have shown up in submission entries.