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I really like this story, especially the twist at the end. Despite this being framed as a sort of pamphlet or advertisement I felt myself rooting for the rebels and to find out the twist (not going to mention what the twist is as too not spoil future readers) was really interesting and compelling.

Thanks for the feedback, I’ll work on adding more immersive language into my next story and look into writing a higher stakes story at some point. I’m also thinking of posting some longer stories on itch.io in the future…

This is really good I really liked the rhythm the text had. The open ending was also really interesting.

Thanks for the feedback I’ll try to work in more description in the next one!