I've had the idea of a hat character in my head ever since seeing a youtube short of it, and just didn't know where I'd be able to put it to use. I figured this jam was just the perfect opportunity to quickly jot it out for posterity!
Enjoyable and clever use of limited wordspace. I enjoyed this a lot! The only unfortunate thing was that I don't seem to be able to restart it without putting in some effort. I was wondering if the search results were random or given in a set order!
I liked this story! It had the perfect amount of detail to get the tale across, and the tale also sounded more or less how I'd expect a curmudgeon to tell it.
The 11th slide is in fact a bug, not your fault. What's happening is that I have an image in my Author's Notes, and the compiler I'm using is bundling it as a Base64 image, but the StoryFormat I'm using is showing that image as text in a separate passage.
In other words, I just had a skill issue in compiling the story ;)
I'll update in a few minutes.
Updated! Both issues have been fixed. Thanks for helping to make my story even better!
Wow, a masterclass in building up suspense. I found myself wanting to read more at the end.
At least the tale's short enough that going through and seeing multiple endings isn't hard at all. Both endings felt abrupt, but while Dagymiel's was fine, I felt like Harvick's could have used another paragraph so the reader could understand what was going on.
Ahh, details are so tough. If you include too many, the combat is dry, if you include too few, no one knows what's going on. It's particularly difficult for me to nail that balance, and I err on the side of adding too few, but it's for that reason that your compliments means all the more to me!
But I guess that means I gotta work on the other stuff to match up with the action ;)
I liked this story! It's short, cute, and wistful, and I feel that the emotions you wrote into the story came out well and clear. I could stand to learn from your style of writing quite a bit.
Also, I was surprised that you introduced the drinks in a different order than we recalled them! I distinctly remember the 2 iced vanilla lattes being last, but lo and behold, they were first when the waitress came!
Nice suggestion! I normally do add interesting pictures (as you can see from my previous entries), but I wrote this novel specifically for the 2023 Bare-Bones Jam, which forbids such things!
Now, you could say that I don't have to follow the rules of a random jam, but the truth is that if the jam didn't exist, this novel wouldn't have been written at all, so I felt compelled to do so.
As a reminder, which is still needed after years of this problem, if you post GIFs of raging homosexual activity in my comments section to advertise your game, I will simply delete them and block you.
Edit: I am aware of the three "TThe" typos. I'll update once I'm sure there aren't any critical issues.
The sylphs issue is an author skill issue. I was learning literally everything to be learned with this first story, and simply didn't make the best decisions. That resulted in this technical issue. This will, unfortunately, not be fixed without a rewrite of the tooltip system, which I have no plans to do for this story.
Story crafting an IF was also a first for me, which led to the errors with the non-sequiturs and same-ish paragraphs. These will likely not be fixed in the foreseeable future. If you check out my other two stories, you will likely, and unfortunately, see some of the same traits.
I've gone ahead and fixed the second and third issues in my internal build, which also has other minor fixes and spelling corrections.
Should I ever rewrite the story (and I may, as this one is my first), I'll address all these issues.
There are several different types of anthropomorphic characters in fantasy. By specifying that you cannot have breasts, you know which kind of lizard you're playing.
Protagonist characters in my story don't have a gender, instead, you can change either your pronouns or your set of genitalia. Depending on your definition of gender, this should work for you. If you're having an issue with this, please let me know. There may be a bug impacting your gameplay.
You can't change race because I am a single person, and writing variations for a half-dozen races would be too much of a burden for me to perform at this time. I'm still trying to get good at just writing with 3 (pronoun sets) times 4 (genitalia option) times 2 (breasts options), 24 options in mind! Though it is easier to (and I do) break these options down into constituent parts (tail v. no tail, for instance), I simply cannot at this time afford the time to allow multiple race choices while maintaining a viable product.
Once again, if you post unsolicited comments of homosexual jacked-up guys railing each other in my comments section, I will simply just report them, delete them, and move on.
Once you've reached the scene regarding the beetles there are one (or two) more passages. Though if you haven't done all the lounge scenes, there are more.
All I can give you right now is an apology for putting out a badly tested game. Please accept my apologies for my shoddy work. I hope this doesn't hamper your enjoyment of my series!
I'll update the game in about 30 minutes when I fix it. When I do, I'll edit this post accordingly.The issue has been fixed, please refresh your browser or redownload the game. You shouldn't need to restart the game for the scene to load.
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The Problem:
There are three main routes you can take through the game to get there, and it looks like the "Game-End" message isn't firing for two of them after I changed how the style of the game looks. This is interesting because I did 0 logic changes in my last update. So did I have an issue before I did the style change that my testing missed?
That's a problem I'll have to look through version control to identify and learn from so that my future games can get better.
Just a reminder folks. If you post unsolicited advertisements for your game in my comments section, I will just report you, delete your post, and move on.
