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I must confess to being a little disappointed that the story doesn't extend beyond the introduction and contract. All the fun stuff in a story like this happens after that.

The setup is nice, though, and I think if you continue this it could be a really good game. I sincerely hope you keep working on it or that when you do continue it, I don't entirely forget about it as I tend to do.

Great concept. Good writing. Very descriptive and excellent use of music and audio to set the mood. To a small degree it makes me think of Lost Odyssey's A Thousand Years of Dreams and how whenever you unlock a memory in Kaim's past, you would get these visually simple and blurred, but still quite beautiful backgrounds and sounds and music would play as you progressed. It was just enough to help keep your attention and your game does some of that. I think it's something more text-based games should really consider. Atmosphere is everything.

Good luck and I hope to hear from you again! Kudos on the interesting prologue and the massive amount of choice given. I'll keep this save somewhere I can see it often to remind me to come back someday.

With older games on PC the fix is often to override DPI Scaling in the Compatibility tab and give control to the Application. Maybe that will help you here. "Properties" > "Change high DPI settings" and it should be at the bottom. Check the box and select "Application".

Great game. The enemies are a bit too aggressive, in my opinion, but the atmosphere, story and gameplay are all very well done. Kudos to you. Keep it up.

Well, sort of obvious, but worth mentioning: Spore. The cell stage is pretty much just this game more or less, but each stage doesn't last very long and the meat of the game is focused around the space stage.

You will NEVER be a great writer until you learn to accept criticism without acting like an angry, horny little child and do some personal reflection.

You are not required to change anything about your writing, but if all you ever do when someone challenges your work is throw a fit, you're always going to be an amateur. Hope this is nothing more than a hobby for you, because it's not going to be a career. Promise you.

"The focus of Harem Hotel has never only been a hotel full of women you can fuck."

Oh dear god, you're delusional. It's a fucking porno game and it's named "Harem Hotel", how disconnected from reality are you that you don't see what you're making here?

"If you want tits and ass, go to pornhub."

I said I wanted more of a personal story, but do you actually think what you made here is anything other than a porno game? Really, are you actually this deluded? Take a look at yourself. You didn't use Honey Select, a literal Japanese porno game, as the basis for your own game because it was convenient, you used it because you wanted to have tits and ass in your game.

You know what? I really don't have time for someone this laughably dense. If you want to be taken seriously, you should start by not making porno games. Nothing about your writing convinces me you understand reality, which is fine because that's not why anyone's here (and you know it), but I guess it was silly of me to think you had a brain in that thick skull of yours.

Maybe when you stop jerking off to your own ego and start jerking off to your own game you'll clear your head for a minute, reread what you just said to me and realize how utterly ridiculous of a person you are and make some changes.

Maybe your writing will vastly improve then, too.

I was worried you'd respond like this. Your inability to take criticism isn't a good look for you. You don't have to agree, you certainly don't have to change your game for it, but if the best response you can give to my criticism is "if you don't want a serious story, this game isn't for you" about a game that's literally just based on fucking a bunch of women at once, you have something seriously disconnected in your brain.

You are not writing classical literature here, you're writing smut. I'm not criticizing that, I'm playing the smut like everyone else here, but you need some perspective desperately.

I agree with you. It's not to be rude, only constructive, but the whole story isn't very interesting to me and in particular takes me out of it.

I'd much rather have more of a personal focus on Lin and her life than a wider focus on elves as a whole. That feels like it should be something optional, not the only way to further her story.

I think the problem isn't that you're addressing the whole "slavery" thing, so much as making it a big part of her story. It's more than a little unbelievable that you and Lin are going to change history, not to mention a bit much for the focus of the game: a harem hotel.

I don't mean to be overly critical, but the story with Lin makes me want to approach it less because it gets to be a little overwhelming, when I'd rather just focus on her individual life and not the lives of every single elf in the game and how we can save them.

I mean this is a game where you're basically just getting your rocks off with every grown woman that walks into the hotel, it just seems like the focus should be a little less... revolutionary.

Because it isn't done yet. What an odd question.