Thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you're having so much fun with the system! It's always cool to hear the stories players create.
I'm currently playtesting the 4th edition, which will change a lot of stuff. If you want to keep up with the development, I suggest you check the discord server. I often post test design for rules and sheets, and we're always having fun chatting about anything!
Thank you so, so much for the feedback and directness. For a small creator like me, an insight such as yours is gold.
I'm working on new rules for the 4th edition, basically rebuilding everything from scratch, taking in consideration all the problems you've pointed out and making many other improvements. Right now, I'm playtesting the rules as I build them. If you're interested in keeping up with the project, I suggest you check out the official discord server. The link is in the project page.
I'll fix the typos as soon as my day job lets me, and I'll consider building a Moves table of contents in the next update — it's very reasonable, and I'm grateful for your idea.
Also, it always makes me glad to know someone else is having fun with my little game.
For example, you can't just "learn" to be a Gunslinger out of the blue, you also must frame it fictionally: the character trains hard by herself with a gun, or is taught by someone else, your call — it just has to make sense inside the story.
If I were you, I'd write specific conditions for buying the asset, like "this asset can only be chosen when you gather information about X", or something along these lines.
Oof, that's on me. The second Path of Radiance ability should say you awake at sunrise. Will fix that too. And the third ability is made pretty much useless by being Weak Blood.
1. Will add this to an update: "When you meditate silently for 30 minutes while repeating the name of someone with whom you share a blood link you can communicate telepathically with her for one scene." Thank you for noticing!
2. Yes. See Weaknesses in page 59.
3. It reverses your sleep cycle. You still spend 1 blood to wake up.
4. Of course! Feel free to do whatever you want with the game.
5. You can still pick Fierce and use your claws, it works mechanically the same way, just narratively different. And you can still pick Path of Radiance.
And thank you for your compliment! I hope you have a blast!
Wow, thank you so much for your kind words, Mordred!
Great suggestion! I can't promise I'll add more narrative mechanics, but the new world building options will certainly make the fiction more colorful and free.
To be honest I thought about other truths but I didn't include any because they weren't that interesting tbh. I might revamp this aspect of the game in the future and introduce many new truths — I'd love to! In the meantime, I must think about them. The one about the origin of vampirism is great!
Thank you for your feedback. You're right, including an example of gameplay in the book would not be a bad idea. I will keep that in mind for future revisions.
Anyway, KJ Curry has published a bit of her Elegy gameplay on her channel. You might want to check it so you can get a taste of what the game can play like.
