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首先故事还是不错的，设定很讨喜，强大的力量魂穿主角的故事很常见，但整体来说第一章还是很不错的。但是第二章燕公子单枪匹马闯进去最后导致暴乱还反咬龙的哪里我觉得有些降智或是说有点崩人设。从开头就能看出来燕公子心地善良而且不是那种不谙世事的富家少爷，反而他很聪明考虑的非常多，在龙提醒当他遇到危险要付出代价的情况下燕公子依旧一意孤行单枪匹马试图用语言骂醒军官我认为是不合理的，至少和之前聪明的人设对不上。况且在暴乱后还一意孤行的指责龙的问题，说他插手这一切，我认为龙的态度已经非常好了，如果不是有先前的羁绊主角几乎就是在把自己的智商摁在地上作死。所以我认为这段剧情如果可以的话作者还可以斟酌一下。当然我很喜欢这个游戏，我喜欢这个故事，期待后续的发展，也希望作者能做下去！这仅仅是我的一些建议！

Really, that's great. Thank you very much! I'll try to find it.XD

I have to correct a machine translation that I think is problematic to ensure that he can really express my meaning correctly. "But I still think this is a game with many NSFW elements."

This is a long comment!

 First of all, I like this game very much. Every character in it is very cute. But I still think it may be a game with more elements, although I don't think it's a bad thing but it makes me like it more! But as a literature lover, I hope to see more stories in the next update! Of course, all this is very good, and it is just my selfish suggestion! I love this game, and I love the author. 

Because my mother tongue is Chinese, I used the machine translation, which may cause dyslexia. Sorry.

天哪，我真的很喜欢这个游戏，虽然我听不懂这些语言但从他的游戏外演示来看真的很不错，所以我真的希望这个游戏能有中文翻译版，因为我的母语是中文，谢谢！