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That's awful to hear :(

For what it's worth, I think the story you're setting up is pretty interesting. Some things do need some polishing, but I can see this going places. All I can say is that good things take some time, and that I believe learning from bad reviews and deciding what to apply to improve is the way (at least in part) to success.

I know this comes from nowhere, but if you think you'd continue with some help, I'm willing to volonteer, consider it a collaboration, to help you develop the story. I know nothing of Ren'py, but I do know a bit about writing and more about cinematography and image and video editing, and I also speak Spanish, which I think would make things way easier for you (I'm typing this in English purely so other people can understand it if they read it).

Unfortunately, I'm not in an economic position to support a patreon, but I can tell you if I were, I'd strongly consider supporting this.

I thought it looked like Honey Select 2, but I wasn't sure, you did a great job with the models.

Honestly, quite better than I expected! I'm very interested to know how this will continue, nice job! May I ask what did you use to make the models and all?

Is there a community Discord server or something like that? It's a pretty nice tool to keep track and stay up to date with this kind of stuff :)

Also, a Walkthrough that tells you what choices lead to what outcomes could be pretty nice.

If possible, you could also add a "gallery" option to see the unlocked scenes, like some other VNs do.

Welcome to the club, lol.

Damn, dude, I pretty much agree with everything. This game is good stuff. Funny thing is I'm not into VNs at all, the onley ones I play are Caribdis'.

Exactly the way I feel about it, the sex scenes are just a pleasant addition, but the story is actually really good. Nova's "reveal" near the end really gave me goosebumps. It can be a bit cliche some times, like "I'm the one who never misses", but I still love it.

Nikolai's slogan, "The borders of Russia never end" got me good, too, I forgot to mention that on my other comment. I'm also studying Russian so I feel good for understanding it first try lol.

Easy: all girls are best girl!

Though Luna, Annie and Nova are ahead of the rest.

I personally like to see these as episodes of a series. Caribdis' way of releasing them from cliffhanger to cliffhanger also helps.

No need to apologize, it's just I'm a bit of a gun nerd lol.

But seriously, really good job, it's top tier.

Daaamn, 0.2 is so good! Nova, much like Annie and Luna is extremely cute, she's so loveable, I like the detail that she likes headpatting, that's so cute.

(spoilers ahead if you haven't played 0.2)

Just one thing I have to point out if you can bother to go back and redo it or maybe for future reference: when Nova shoots with the rifle, it shouldn't be the entire bullet that comes out, but rather just the tip or projectile.

From what I've seen, there's no "family situation". There's something somewhat similar, but definitely not the same concept.

If it were possible, I think having an option to access te gallery from the main menu instead of having to load a savegame would be a pretty cool addition, I don't know if the engine allows for this though.

Honestly, same.

I actually noticed two, one in the beginning monologue and the other one in a conversation with certain mysterious girl.

It could be an interesting toggle like the pregnancy thing.

Yeah, Luna and Annie are just too cute.

For real. When I discovered OIALT, I wasn't even horny when palying, I just genuinely really liked it. So far Eternum seems to be following the same path.

I have to say, as much as I ended up liking the characters in OIALT, I'm already liking these more. Like I said on my other comment, Annie and Luna are just too cute, not only for their looks, but also for their personality.

Seriously, top tier work, especially for an itch.io game, and you cal clearly tell how much you've improved since oialt.

Also Annie and Luna are overly cute.

Ok so I couldn't wait like I said I would... I'm loving it already, and I'm usually not one for visual novels but yours are just so good! I loved the little references to Once in a Lifetime, ex-president Stabb already had me laughing from the beginning. If you're still making games by the time I have a stable income, I'll be very likely joining you on Patreon.

Hey, that MMORPG is the one Judie mentiones nearing the end of Once in a Lifetime. Can we expect some sort of crossover? 👀

I just found out you're making this, I'll wait for a couple more updates and download it :p

Oh yes! Nice!

I have to say this is by far the best visual novel I've played; engaging, sexy and really funny, I love the type of humour.

I can't help but feeling, seeing how tender some scenes get, that a visual novel in this same style made by you but that revolves over a couple who are in love, instead of the whole harem thing, could be awesome.