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The way you are currenly formatting it, I seperated the narration from MC's thoughts completely since there's "I thought" at the end of the internal monologue with the AI. 

If there are 2 types of thoughts, one expressed through narration and one expressed through dialogue then I don't think there's a more intuitive way to it. I suppose a "I nearly jump as the AI responds to my thoughts." in the first interaction along with subtle reminders like "I'm still not used to the whole mind speaking thing." is ok enough.

Another thing about the formating, you could bold/italic all dialogues between MC and AI instead of quotation marks and ofc, show MC as the speaker to make it clearer, but that's just imo.

Ooh new fvn with new MEN to gush about :> Spoilers alert if you didn't read it btw!

1. UI / Readability

First of all, I love the story UI. However, I can't help but feel that the main menu is unfinished since its style is the default one. Will you update that UI in future builds?

Idk if visual novels do this since I don't read much, but perhaps you should introduce pauses in dialogue, especially after "," and "." since there are really long ones.

Thirdly, and it's just a minor thing but the buttons are covered in the diary page, so I have to use the mouse scroll wheel to return to the previous dialogue.

I feel like thought should be expressed better since a few lines (in the AI part) have quotations but no speaker which really confused me.

2. Plot

I can't help but feel the first scene of the VN is too inconsequential. It could ruin (allegedly) the careers of three of the most influential people in the galaxy, and they just greenlight it like that? I kind of expected some overseeing and managing to be mentioned, but Idk

I'm kinda wondering why Goober (MC) (my sense of naming is awesome) was implanted a universal translation? In hindsight they don't really benefit anything from giving a specimen a chance to expose them using their language.

3. Gushing

The setting and worldbuilding as of right now is definitely my cup of tea ("kidnapped by wolf men"), and Vaast...Ok but the size diff tho... I need him, I need him bad >.<

Repost cuz I realized I wrote on the wrong page lol

The detective's personality is so goofy I love it. Also 56 seconds before deadline is crazzy

Very handsome wolfo ^^