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A Moment of Bliss | Chapter 5 Final - Release! comments · Posted in A Moment of Bliss | Chapter 5 Final - Release! comments
sweet - really looking forward to immersing in the rest of your story world. feel like you set the stage for some cool stuff to unfold in future VNs - and weirdly I wanna play more to see how the character stuff unfolds too cause ya did a great job at it in this one and planting seeds for future stuff. :P
I didn't want to leave a 1-star negative review as I know there's a lot of work that goes into crafting a Visual Novel, and I don't want to affect your ability to develop and sell your story moving forward. Here's my thoughts after getting through Chapter 1.
This is a quite bare-bones experience for $6.99. If you buy it know that you're doing so to support a storyteller, however I feel it still needs work for the Chapter 1.
There's approximately 2 hours of playtime as advertised, however a lot of it is dialogue that feels like a chore to get through + way too many "character smiles at you" or "you smile at a character" moments in the writing. If it was a drinking game any time someone smiled you'd be dead of alcohol poisoning pretty quick,
I know it's only the first pass at the story / first chapter, and I just wanted to share this as something to be aware of as you dial in your story and I believe you'll be able to make a better product. I hope ya don't take the feedback in a negative way and can use it to fine-tune your writing.
Also - some of the images were over-exposed in the renders - something to work on.
I liked the concept of the story - the premise was unique and I'd be curious to see how it plays out, but it has to be tightened up from a dialogue standpoint / remove a lot of 'smiles'.