absolutely agree. The best VN authors include less telling and more showing and reduce the amount of unnecessary monologue; additional, the best grant views from all angles with less constant face-to-face interactions. Telling a story is as much an art form as the delivery of gorgeous scenes. Too much monologue is a crutch and a clear sign the creator(s) is/are lacking the storytelling capabilities.
Note: this VN has great aspects of the better VNs, and snipping out some of the monologue and relying on scene construction and dialogue to tell the story would greatly benefit a quite good project.